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Old 01-31-2008, 12:13 PM   #1 (permalink)
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Arrow New Capture Page!

If you'd like to review my capture pages that would be great!

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They both redirect to the same website and are both for the same business. Let me know what you think. Thanks!
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Old 01-31-2008, 12:23 PM   #2 (permalink)
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I actually kind of like the first one, but the second, not so much. To be honest, I see these pages and they remind me of every other GRQ page I see. Is it possible to come up with something a little more original or are you just posting this link to get traffic? That's not a condescending remark, btw, people do it.

I would honestly suggest either a little 'bloggier' layout or something totally new. Talk to a web firm or just glance at portfolio's online. Use a decent website builder and not the godaddy.com crap. (Can anyone tell how much I hate them?) and alas, after checking.. you are in fact using godaddy.com. Does no one do any research anymore?

Keep your domains there and get a real host. One with cpanel. I swear to god you will love the fantastico apz
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first one good but second one rubbish
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Old 01-31-2008, 02:11 PM   #4 (permalink)
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Thanks for the comments guys. Why is it that you like the second one more? Do you have any experience with capture page conversion?

If you are not familliar, these type of "hype" pages are what converts well. I didn't like the way these pages look either when I first got into the industry. Thats why you see alot of them look like this, because they just work that way. Being a web designer, Id love to show off my skills on this page, but I literally have to dumb down my work to get the sites to convert better believe it or not.

So again, any reasons why the first page over the second page? Thanks!

Also I used Dreamweaver to build my site, not GoDaddy. I just upload my files there thats all I need them for.
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Old 02-07-2008, 03:58 PM   #5 (permalink)
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Ahh honestly, when I see pages with the get rich quick stories on there it turns me off and kind of sends the message "Is it too good to be true?" Just thought you might like to think of that. Perhaps you should try a message like this company does with money go to:

ppc-coach(dot)com/pricing(dot)php

Look at their message on trying to get people to sign up. Its great. Also you say you might be having a little trouble designing your web pages or making different ones. I would have to recommend you to go to oswd(dot)org they have thousands of free templates that you can change around and make work for your site. As for your conversions and ppc do you read such blogs as bluehatseo(dot)com and earnersblog(dot)com? Try really reading those
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My first impression is that the page is very hard to read. Visually there is no anchor for the eyes to go to first. Without that anchor is difficult to tell where to start reading. Because of that the eyes wander.

I am a big fan of the 5 w's (who, what, when, where, why) when it comes to an informational page like this.

You have a section on the first page that says What, but it doesn't really answer that question. Even after reading the page, I am not sure what R2R is, or why I should sign up.
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I like the first one and not the second one. The first one has less content, to-the-point material. I like the color scheme also. The second looks too busy, with major content in both columns, it's hard to focus on why I should sign up.

My 2 cents.
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1. Too many content and forced sign up without any navigation
2. Give me the feeling that I am going to get into a scam once i sign up - unprofessional 2 hour job website that might scam my money.
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