Looking for honest feedback.....

[Voi Network]

Good Morning Everyone,

I have been working on a few things during my free time from schooling. I would love if you could take a look and give me your honest opinons!!!!

Voices Over the Internet
Hubpages - Boat Buying
Hubpages - Christmas Shopping

I have never been great at writing, but have been studying to be a better writer, I would really appreciate any feedback, good or bad!!!!

Thanks,
Jessica

[benmaxime]

Good start. Too many ads, header is too large...

[justAname]

about your voices over the internet site...the content of your site is good...and also the layout...what i have noticed is your header,i think you should choose a more appropriate header for your site like that..

[stmcdonald]

I did like you first site. It was colorful and playful and drew my eye into your content. Good job.

The ads went mainly un-noticed and I do agree there are too many. You may want to create more of niche and offer some type of subscription service to gain loyal followers.

Spencer McDonald

[YoungEnglishman]

Hi,

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Here's my humble opinion on your blogspot page
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The twitter and facebook social bookmarking buttons can be a lot larger and bolder

There is an abundance of free social bookmarking buttons on the internet.

You seem to have a very friendly theme to your blog and I think custom social bookmarking buttons would really add a unique touch to the top right-hand corner.

I see you have affiliate links and Google Adsense on your website but they do not seem very targeted. Try and ask yourself "what are my customers looking for?" Then use affiliate links that match the desires of the market you are appealing to.

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I'm going to be honest about your first hubpages page
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Your display picture reminds me of insurance or financial websites. I find it impossible to believe that the image is of you. As a user I'd feel far more connected to you if I thought you had a genuine picture of yourself on your page.

Use shorter paragraphs because this will appeal to seasoned readers and novices alike.

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Here's my review of your second hubpages page
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The glaring problem for me here is the paragraph size. I feel intimidated by the big size of the paragraphs. I generally take a very short break after paragraphs and it makes it exhausting to read through large blocks of text.

Your grammar is really good. May I suggest using a wordpress blog next?