NYC - Online Retailing Website

[BRIS_DEPT]

Hi All,

Me and my partners are currently looking for investors for a online clothing retail website.

The website will be selling woman's clothing. Currently, there is a void in the fashion community and a certain demographic is not being supplied. Our company is here to fill that void and capitalize on this demographic which has a great deal of disposable income.

Our targeted demographic is growing rapidly due to the internet and we hope we can start immediately. As of now, we have a business plan, supplier, and a custom built webstore module.

All partners fill very specific roles and are willing to devote all their time to this project, which means they will disregard all previous commits (quit jobs). All partners are very talented in there respects fields and all yield impressive resumes.

As of now, we have had some interest from a couple of very prestigious financial firms here in New York. But due to the economy, they are unable to finance the project.

Currently we are looking for $100,000. This will include a 100% dedication from all partners.

Obviously, we want to keep our ideas secure and will only disclose a certain amount of information within this post. If you are interested in our business feel free to email aydoubleu at gmail or send a PM.
Thank You.

[PsiPro]

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• [x] Not well articulated
• [x] Is to generic, you need more of a niche market
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• [ ] IS YELLING AT ME.
• [x] Lacks significant detail
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• [x] Is not selling you, as a business partner well
• [ ] Is hard to read (spelling errors, grammar, l33t speak)
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• [x] Provides no indication of being able to meet in real life (mostly important if your asking for large sums of money)
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Extra Comments:
I never would have guessed there is a untapped woman's fashion market.