I may be a bit anal-retentive when it comes to spelling and grammar, but I really believe that if you'd like someone to invest any amount of money in you or your business, you could do a little better than "i", "your" (you're was the correct usage), "Im", "ill" (I assume "I'll", not a sickness). I don't think it is much to ask that when trying to act professional, you also try to look professional.
I have no problem with a lot of the ranting and rambling posts at YE that do not observe those standards, and I understand that not everyone is fluent in English, but you are specifically requesting something from others.

Just my take on it. I will not invest in a business that is represented as sloppy in the earliest proposal stages (or any stage).