Blog Is Complete

[Denis3721]

Howdy Entrepreneurs, my blog is complete check it out! Tell me whats cool and whats not. Give me a good review. Thank you...

the link to my blog is: doughstreet.com

[Denis3721]

i just completed the Shop page... Doughstreet.com/shop Please tell me what you think...thank you

[richkid]

looks good... but I am not a fan of blogs with swearing in them.

[BusinessAdviser]

You lost me. When I read anyone's writing, there are two things, more than anything else, that tell me that the writer is unintelligent and thus that I needn't read any further. As I looked through your blog, it became clear that you are unintelligent and your blog is not worth taking the time to read. I'm sorry if that seems to insult you, and now I'm likely to have my name plastered across your site as another mean YEer, but it's the truth.

Let me explain.

Here is an excerpt, just from the VERY FIRST paragraph of your blog:

"When you go over to someone else’s house or use someone else’ computer, the common sense notion is, to not fuck with their computer. Most people are unaware of this etiquette, but seriously, a person’s computer is like their home. Why the fuck do you think they call PERSONAL COMPUTER. Your computer is personal and is arranged is a certain way and manner."

First, if you either are unable to use simple proper grammar or, if you are able, are unable to take an extra minute or two to proofread your post, you lack the requisite intelligence for me to bother spending any more time reading your blog. The paragraph above alone has AT LEAST SEVEN grammatical errors - and there are only four sentences!

Second, I have no issues with the use of swearing, per se. HOWEVER, it's like my father used to tell me, it's a sign of unintelligence to use them so frequently, as it shows that you are not smart enough to think of another word to express yourself. Moreover, the more you swear, the less effect your words really have. I've found that if you reserve such language for times when it is REALLY needed to express yourself, it will have a much deeper and lasting effect on whomever is reading your blog.

So at least as to not be attacked in your blog as critiquing you without offering any advice, here is a more direct offering of advice to you:

Your blog does not need to be grammatically perfect, but take the time to proofread it before you post. If I perceive from your first paragraph that you are unintelligent, why would I expect your content to be any more intelligent? Simply reading through your post one time before posting it can do wonders.

Also, reserve your swearing to issues on which you REALLY want to make a point. Throughout most of your posts, take the opportunity to show your readers that you are an intelligent, well-versed individual who provides interesting thoughts and worthwhile reading. THEN, when an issue comes along about which you cannot express your feelings without swearing, swear, though still sparingly. I think you'll be amazed at how much more powerful this type of use of such words will be.

Take this for what it is: constructive criticism. Disregard it if you want. Attack me if you desire. I don't care either way, but I do think that heeding my advice will make for a better blog.

[paul2145r]

I think that this blog may be entertaining to someone that doesn't have any interest in propriety or educated thought. I guess you will probably have a chance at people reading it- there are plenty of mindless masses out there that will absorb anything with foul language and sexual inuendo involved.

As an example: the "Dumb Entrepreneurs" section. How can you put up a link to your blog from the very site that you are criticizing. If you have a problem with someone on the forums, take it up with them here, instead of crying about it on your own blog. I bet Akula really appreciated you bringing him up as a "user who likes to start sh*t". It sounds to me like defamation of character. Seriously- if you can't take the heat, then get out of the d*mn kitchen! (The swearing is a pun on the obvious idiocy of the content of the blog being reviewed. I apologize to all of the minors and/or ladies that may read this).

This blog makes me think of something that came from the unholy union of a cops/nascar watching hillbilly and a 17 y/o rich card-carrying Future Yuppy of America. Sorry to be so blunt, but clean up the act. If you can convince me of your merit as an author, then maybe (just maybe) I'll make an effort to read something else that you have written.

[drewie]

This is totally offtopic but Denis, do you actually provide piracy material for a fee on that site of yours in your signature?
Interesting business..

[paul2145r]

Haha, it's Napster all over again!

[Denis3721]

hehe yeah my blog is supposed to be an entertaining business blog. I just started so you will see more articles that are intelegent.

And yes the site on my signiture does provide you with free software...etc

[Denis3721]

hey thanx for the the reviews, I appreciate it! I learned a lot from jemnq2. The business blog is supposed to be a strange one, with controversial articles. Im just trying something different. thats all...

Please keep the reviews coming...

[Denis3721]

drewie - its not illegal im providing users with links i find on google.com

[paul2145r]

Bazillion, hehehe... Hard to take a critique seriously when someone uses the word bazillion...

I think your blog sucks. I can find 100 other blogs saying the same thing, but better.

I think you should delete it and find a different route.

It is basic, it is repetitive, it can't compete with the bazillion other blogs saying the same thing, it isn't entertaining, and is far from creative and new, refreshing, and interesting.

My opinion.

[Denis3721]

haha ideamaster, i have taken a look at your blog... If you get more traffic then I do...I will quit the blog game!

[Denis3721]

I have just taken out all the bad posts that have foul language in them... What do you think of the blog now?? Keep the reviews coming.. Thank you

[akula]

the blog is bad because it's ineffective..not on account of the content or the design, but because you've never asked anyone what a blog is and what it's supposed to do.

a business blog is not a diary. it's a social networking tool. it's purpose is to expand and deepen your personal business network (and the network of your audience). to function properly, the author of the blog has to find other business bloggers they wanna do business with, link to their posts, expand on what the blogger has written, and then send a follow up email asking for comments.

when you follow this process, over time, what you get is a deeply hyperlinked social graph which is connecting lots of business bloggers with other business bloggers - and as a business person, my utility for reading this blog is to plug into your web of business contacts...which i can't do now, because you don't link to people. stop treating your blog as if it was a diary.

the point: your blog is ineffective...not from my perspective, but from your perspective. you're not using it in the way that it ought to be used, and therefore, you won't achieve any desired results doing what you're currently doing. make the change, start hyperlinking to people and sending follow up emails to build a valuable, differentiated social graph that I can plug into to help my business.

[paul2145r]

Hehehe, someone's trying to push others into playing the lottery game again.