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    GPowell is offline Junior Member
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    Please Read my business letter

    This is my business letter (The first and only one I wrote), I'm writing for to record labels please help

    The purpose of this letter is to receive information about all internships available in the summer. I am interested in an internship because it will give me some experience working in the part of the music industry I want to be involved in. My first and only choice is to obtain a job at a record label in my future. Distinctively the job I want is in the marketing department, on tours or in the A&R department.

    I have no experience with working at a record label at all. My current job is being an International Business major at Central State University. There I take Chinese and other Business related courses. I'm involved with the marketing club, and Student Leader Institute program. After graduation I plan to work for a record label if not I'm going to start my own.

    I have done a lot of research about record labels for years. On the internet and read numerous books, such as "The Music Powers that be to Succeed in the Music Industry by C. Cirocco Jones". During my study I have written numerous business plans, to prepare myself for a future with record labels. In more detail, I researched the A&R position the most incase I don't start a label this is what I want to be.
    If possible I would like to further discuss the opportunities for internships this summer. I am unable to participate in any events during school days because of my classes. If I don't hear any response in a couple of weeks, I am going to follow up with calls, emails, and letters. I greatly appreciate the time you spent reading this letter, and I hope to hear and meet with you soon.

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    Iamnotsatisfied is offline Senior Member
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    lol love the ending

    "if you do not respond I am going to spam all your forms of communication... Thank you"

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    Quote Originally Posted by Iamnotsatisfied View Post
    lol love the ending

    "if you do not respond I am going to spam all your forms of communication... Thank you"
    lol you make it sound like MLM
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    studynz2008 is offline Junior Member
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    Yes, keep on contacting them for further discussions in the future! Great letter, hope you will able to get an internship

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    GPowell is offline Junior Member
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    Thank You for reading this, but i'm confused do you really think this letter is good or are you all being sarcastic. This is my first letter and I want honest reviews

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    acousticgroupie is offline Junior Member
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    I think it's written a little awkwardly and passively. You should be more direct and NOT start most sentences with I...

    Good luck!

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    Do not keep contacting them. Make really compelling business letters and send them to many companies.

    Did you know that Mr.Soichiro Honda (The founder of Honda Company) wrote 18.000 business letters to companies all over Japan?

    Good luck!
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    http://profitable.act2succeed.com

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    GPowell is offline Junior Member
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    Apreciate the replies, I will take them in consideration

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