Posted a new cpc ad today wanted some feedback

**solomonsmine** · 01-17-2007 11:59 PM

First of all I apologize if I am not posting this to the appropriate location, and hopefully a moderator will come to my rescue before the spam police are alerted.

Next disclaimer: This thread is for the network marketers or fencesitters lurking among us here at YE. Although I welcome any first impressions and constructive criticism.

Okay, so on with the question

or shameless spam depending on your POV).

I have had quite a bit of self-taught expensive lessons in the google adwords and other CPC arenas. And what I have found is that there tend to be very similar approaches used by most folks advertising in the MLM/opportunity/Network Marketing arena lots of "make $300-$1200 a day from home" or "Get paid while you sleep" I could go on but you've all seen plenty of them. Until now I have had my best results in this particular marketing mode by being kind of crude or shocking to break through peoples filter I've even used: "my wife is hot yours is not because I'm rich" Oh it works somewhat but it isn't terribly 'feel good' and not really in character, quite frankly. So I am trying a new approach and wanted some feedback:
I'm trying the plain truth approach with facts displayed and of course hoping to attract the interest of those who 'get it' so here it is:
We Did it Everybody
A Method Where Prospects Come To You
Converting At 25% + Duplication
www.solomonsmine.ws

Any thoughts(kind of feels anti climactic after all the lead-up-LOL)

**The Stealthy One** · 01-18-2007 07:04 AM

Hmmm, I definitely would not click on that one. The first one would get my attention; the new one would not.

**Satch** · 01-18-2007 08:15 PM

I wouldnt click on the 'wife' one because Im not married and I would also presume the writer is a complete tw@t for making a statement like that! It gives no credibility in my opinion.

As for the new one: I dont like the opening line 'We Did it Everybody' - it makes me think a bit like; who are you talking to? It needs to be aimed at the individual.

I would click on something like:

Quick Website Leads For You!
A simple and low-cost method so Prospects come to you.
- Currently Converting at 25%

Just what I would do, not necessarily right but I think its better than the 'wife' one and an improvement on your new one.

Good luck with it anyway. Regards, Satch.

**solomonsmine** · 01-18-2007 10:09 PM

I appreciate the input, You are quite right about the failure to target by using the 'everybody' in fact after sleeping on it I find it pretty weak. I think I might give your suggestion a try though. To be honest I have 40 new prospects contacting me just from the last 3 days but I am really eager to improve those numbers in order to hit my targets sooner - I have to ba careful though as I am doing a lot of mentoring and training as well - so time management is critical - anyway thanks for the ideas. - saves me some time.